Sarah, Overall, nice job on this. You are close to getting a 4 on it. Some mistakes I heard were:
1)"The man and woman IS having a conversation..." It should be, "the man and the woman ARE having..."
2)"...but her car has THE flat tire..." should be, "...but her car has a flat tire..."
3) "...the first one is taking THE taxi to...." Should be "...the first one is taking a taxi to..."
4)"...The 2nd one is borrowing her roomate's..." This was your biggest mistake in this response. It is unclear exactly what you are talking about when you start this sentence. You said, "The 2nd one..." You should have said, "The 2nd Solution the man offers..." The reason why is because it is hard to decipher whether this sentence is supporting the previous sentence where you spoke about the problem with the first solution. It's important to say the appropriate transition words but it is equally important to clarify what it is you are talking about. Additionally, you are starting a brand new paragraph with this sentence, so it is a topic sentence and requires the appropriate details.
5) "...more convenient for woman, herself, and her friend..." How is it more convenient? Explain this idea more. Plus, it is a little confusing the way you say, "...woman, herself, and her friend.." It sounds as if it is convenient for three people.
Again, nice job on this response. I picked out as much as i could to help you get better. The first 3 mistakes I found were VERY minor and wouldn't affect your score too much. Still, better to correct them if you can!
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Q5/airport pickup:
Sarah, Overall, nice job on this. You are close to getting a 4 on it. Some mistakes I heard were:
1)"The man and woman IS having a conversation..." It should be, "the man and the woman ARE having..."
2)"...but her car has THE flat tire..." should be, "...but her car has a flat tire..."
3) "...the first one is taking THE taxi to...." Should be "...the first one is taking a taxi to..."
4)"...The 2nd one is borrowing her roomate's..." This was your biggest mistake in this response. It is unclear exactly what you are talking about when you start this sentence. You said, "The 2nd one..." You should have said, "The 2nd Solution the man offers..." The reason why is because it is hard to decipher whether this sentence is supporting the previous sentence where you spoke about the problem with the first solution. It's important to say the appropriate transition words but it is equally important to clarify what it is you are talking about. Additionally, you are starting a brand new paragraph with this sentence, so it is a topic sentence and requires the appropriate details.
5) "...more convenient for woman, herself, and her friend..." How is it more convenient? Explain this idea more. Plus, it is a little confusing the way you say, "...woman, herself, and her friend.." It sounds as if it is convenient for three people.
Again, nice job on this response. I picked out as much as i could to help you get better. The first 3 mistakes I found were VERY minor and wouldn't affect your score too much. Still, better to correct them if you can!
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